Sunday, April 8, 2012

Our Love Story

We met on a wave of passionate decision,
grand visions of us bubbled up into the wind.

Despite our stark contrasts and flushed crimson desire,
our love was so shaded by the hue of the wind.

Simmering affection and dreams of defection,
I often fantasized of the new of the wind.

When love's foggy descent left a haze near my heart,
I found myself dreaming of a view from the wind.

Your version of love, suffocating consumption,
trembling, I cried out: I'd rather chew on the wind!

Amplified, tensions swelled part-way through the last act...
as our curtains fell, I took my cue from the wind.

To glide with a strength, a freewheeling renegade,
I had convinced myself that wings grew from the wind.

Improvising encounters of consequence with
unyielding stubbornness, I flew into the wind.

Through tumultuous night, to the mist of the morn,
I learned of fragility from dew on the wind.

While in the rapture of hearing my voice, I found
inspiration to listen deeply through the wind.

And although you've moved on by now, my friend, please know:
I glide on our love story in lieu of the wind.

A poetry prompt from naming constellations (Ghazal poetry form)


  1. Oh how I love the ghazal form, and your poem does it justice. So many beautiful stanzas. I love the idea of 'wings growing from the wind' and the last stanza is a stunning conclusion!

    1. Thank you, Mary! This was my first attempt at this form, and it was very challenging and fun. I think this month is a lesson in patience :)

  2. Nicely done. I was only able to mange the minimum number of stanzas. Yours seems to work very well.

    1. Thank you, Mark. I really like your ghazal. (why does that seem like such a weird compliment?) :) Thanks for stopping by!

  3. This is beautiful, and makes a mockery of my fear of the form. It flows beautifully, and tells a passionate story.

    1. Thank you, vivinfrance :) I feared it too and because I have very little patience to stick to form, I forced myself kicking and screaming into this one. It was painful (in a good way) to work through it, a good learning experience for a newbie like me. Thank you so much for stopping by!